本篇得分: 16/20

    <這是之前念北一女的學姐: 謝珮珮所寫的作文，

      她已經考上台大法律系>

      In the English class last week, Peter did so embarrassing a thing that he could never forget.[e1]  It was a winter afternoon; the sun did not show itself[e2]  all day, and the cold breeze was blowing. In fact, it was a good time for a nap. As the teacher was teaching hard on the stage, Peter fell asleep.

      While the words on the blackboard could no longer come into his mind, Peter dreamed that he himself was the[e3]  teacher, teaching the [e4] complicated grammar. However, the students in his dream did not concentrate on their class. One was staring at the sky outside[e5] , another was playing tricks on his classmates, and others all dozed off! As a teacher, Peter was so annoyed that he flipped his lid[e6] . “Wake up, all of you, wake up,” Peter shouted in anger[e7]  at his students. He decided to double their amounts of assignment[e8]  as punishment, which made all of them really[e9]  awakened at once![e10] 

     “Wake up, you, wake up,” the sound did not stop. However, it was not Peter’s. Peter turned around, trying to find who was speaking. All of a sudden, his whole body was shaking, and he “woke up.” He found his English teacher, the teacher in “real” world, standing just in front of him. The usually friendly-looking teacher was hitting the ceiling[e11]  then. Peter was terribly frightened, and thus he apologized for his sleep[e12]  again and again. Ultimately, the teacher accepted [e13] ; he determined to give Peter[e14]  extra assignment[e15] , hoping Peter would learn a lesson from it. What a nightmare it was! Until now, Peter could not tell exactly whether it was a dream!

字數超足的  我想分數沒意外  應該可以有15分以上  第三段寫的有點不清楚  我想時間也不大夠了吧  還好最後一句結論算是銜接的不錯  可以跟第一段的開頭有結合  整篇都蠻順暢的 句型變化也蠻多元 包括分詞構句 關代 間接問句 感嘆句等的 標點也都有用到分號相當正確  加上這次作文也不好發揮 

普遍大概都寫不好  所以妳寫得這篇應該是蠻吃香的