本篇為學生所寫的三格看圖作文(北區模考)，大致是一家人騎腳踏車，

然後請路人幫忙拍全家合照，結果不小心失足跌入水裡。

<此篇為普雷老師通常首次為學生批改的大致方式>

 

This vacation[MSOffice1]  ,I went to the famous mountain of[MSOffice2]  Japan which have[MSOffice3]  cleaned[MSOffice4]  water and fresh air alone[MSOffice5]  and reduce my preasure[MSOffice6]  on the job[MSOffice7]  . This morning[MSOffice8]  ,I ride[MSOffice9]  the rented bike around the area .Suddenly,someone calls[MSOffice10]  me back and speaks[MSOffice11]  the saying[MSOffice12]  I do not know .But[MSOffice13]  I guess he hopes me to take them pictures[MSOffice14]  so I make a gesture “OK”.

    Unfortunately, when I am ready to take[MSOffice15]  button, I fall down by [MSOffice16] stone. And [MSOffice17] falling in the water, I break my leg and lose my glasses. Before long, I have sent [MSOffice18] to the local hospital and stay there. It is a bad holiday and I just say tomorrow will be better.

 

整篇時態需用過去式

 

以下有批改略語表

 

總分: 8

總結

(1)   故事大致完整有邏輯

(2)   時態錯誤稍多

(3)  中式英文頗多

(4)  嚴重的文法錯誤稍多: ex. 缺乏完整句子的結構觀念，常造成動詞無適當連接或變化

(5) 結論可以再設計更有內容點, 大致僅按照圖片的內容就直接性描述，

        缺少意外性的生動元素或引人好奇之內容

(6) 字數宜再增加至少30字

  

S

 

                spelling

T



            tense



G

 

                   grammar



P

 

                   punctuation

A

 

         ask the teacher

 

V

 

                   voice(active or passive)